Darren's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Jamaica-Man]

The writing needs more "show don't tell." All the dialogue very explicitly explains every last detail of what's going on, and comes off as unnatural exposition. Try to have the animation tell more of the story, or get across the information with more natural dialogue. I think you also know that the voices need some work, since you added the very necessary subtitles. You can find voice actors on newgrounds in the forums.

Rojay101 responds:

Thanks for your advice

[Epic Fail]

You can find voice actors under the Artists & Creators section of the Newgrounds forums.

hugofertre responds:

thank for your advice

[blaze cici and tempest star in rescue shima]

The animation is sketchy and unfinished, and then halfway through the animation stops altogether.

chlfan responds:

josh miller is the animator i was just the director and script writer of this flash idea

[Monster VS StickMan]

When I saw the choice come up, I thought "oh cool, this is a choose your own adventure kinda thing" and was a little disappointed when it was just one choice. So, I'd recommend trying to making something longer with more choices, and a branching story, even if it's just a few choices total.

JohnCage1997 responds:

Yea, I was. In future if I had a big chance of free time, I'll try to improve myself and more interractivity (Inspired by TellTale Games.) since animating is one of my hobbies.

Thanks! Much appreciated! :D
ps. I like your flashes :3

[Pigment]

The credits mention music, but I don't hear any. It also seems like you meant to crop off the top and bottom, but put the wrong proportions in your newgrounds publish settings.

FunkyApple responds:

Yeah, its my first time, how do you take it down? or what is the best way to add full? video and sound here? I'm new to this and want to redo. XD

[Cybertronian Girls]

Pretty good, but just so you know, Megatron is semi-transparent in the first shot, so you may want to render that again.

DakNJaxterLazerNails responds:

Drat... may do.

[The Reward: Tales of Alethrion - "The First Hero"]

When you see something animated this well on the internet, you'll often find that the quality of the story falls short of that of the animation, and it relies on just the visuals to carry it. This is one of those rare cases where the story is great on its own, and the animation is not just icing on the cake, but more like a second cake on top of the first cake. That's 2 delicious, delicious cakes.

TalesofAlethrion responds:

Thank you so much ! It means a lot to us !

[Unlucky targeting]

Needs better pacing

It could have been good, but it was too slow. Use fewer frames next time and it should flow better.

kelleroid responds:

At first I feared it may go too fast.
Now I understand that a faster framerate does not mean alot more frames, so, will do!

[Bitf Animated]

Ha, nice.

I was considering animating some of those, but I see someone beat me to it. As soon as I saw the title I thought "Ooh, I wonder if it's Brawl in the Family." Good job with it. I like that you kept the style.

JPB responds:

Thanks, actually im not the first one to animate brawl in the family, bitf forumer dynawing did that first and animated up to 50 episodes, anyways, you can always contact matthew to do that

[LoL: Oh Yes And Spiders]

Great sprite animation

Seriously, you put other sprite animations to shame. And you know you've made a good flash cartoon when you can hold this many viewers' interest for 28 full minutes.

Emptygoddess responds:

I dunno. Some of them are pretty long and people seem to like them.